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"Breathe. . . " was the first word he had heard when the disjoint world came to a formless solitude, a blank existence. The voice was deep, inhuman but neutral, and though he would not trust it given the turn of events, he was grateful to have felt nothing rather then pain when he rose to his feet to see it; the source of the voice.

"Who are you?!" Paul demanded with mistrust. The figure mirrored his looks with the exception of it being a dark silhouette.

"We are Progeny; the outcome of how you choose to end this."

"How I should choose?!" He snapped, throwing an angered point of accusation. "You've done nothing but throw me in nightmares! What CHOICE do I have to look forward to?!"

"Symbiosis." It answered.

How could that be a choice?! But then again, Maya and Lysanna explained differently.  Perhaps this one was different.

"We have seen the events; the wars of your kind. They are preserved in your DNA. The process of conquest will be of no variance for the assailants who proclaim peace.  When their numbers further multiply, their interests divide, their visions overcome."

"But you are Lysanna's offspring!" He argued with shuddering bitterness.

"We are Progeny." It countered. "Lysanna misaimed her means."

"Misaimed her means. . . " Paul repeated, almost staggering forward as he took a step to come closer to the dark reflection of his self. The being stood still, inanimate in its observation.

Paul then heard the rustling of grass and caught sight of a child running her glee towards a playground. The scene had shifted and Paul found himself seated on a bench with Progeny at his side. The colors subtly shifted from their monochromatic malformation to a vividness his eyes never registered before .  School? This was where he worked. Why was he being shown this?

"You've set out to teach. Why?"

However personal, Paul could not answer such a question for himself.Not in ways he could explain in few terms. "I uh. . ." He'd squint his eyes, swallowing, as  he felt a sudden feeling of fatigue begin to weigh on him, as if a deep just sleep began to call for him. His strength began to wane. "Everyone's busy trying to lead, I thought, without knowing how ignorant they were."

"Ignorant?"

Paul opened his eyes. He was at a library now, reading words in Arabic. That's right. . . He had hoped to become a professor in linguistics, having already known six languages. He translated a sentence that was enlarged beyond all else. "Whenever I set myself the task to learn, I realize how little I know, and the more I learn, the more I realize the capacity of my ignorance." He quoted. Paul would almost fall over the book, before Progeny steadied him.

"Symbiosis." Progeny reminded him in that instant. "We are Progeny. The outcome of a choice. Make it and balance this conflict as you see fit."

Could he?
Progeny can also refer to a product or change due to something. I found chapter 7 as a possible bridge towards the end that I believe should have some of genuine resolution. It is with hope that this sort of resolution is accepted and the readers don't mind some 'cultural citing' :)

495 words; I hope I can get away with that much.

Thank you.
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princeofpencils Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
Alas, this piece has not won. Never the less, I thank you all for the remarks. I'll be sure to hit Chapter 8 with a go.
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reggar Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Very well written, it gives a sort of background and an insight to Paul's thinking and life before the start of the story. Besides, with its style contrasting to the already chosen chapters, it gives an impression of the need to just step back for a moment to think and shows a very philosophical view of the events. Great work! :)
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princeofpencils Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Thank you reggar. I highly appreciate.
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reggar Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012
My pleasure. :)
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princeofpencils Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
The comments are heart warming!

I felt injustice being done to Paul in the past chapters for having no past being mentioned. Since this was one of the last two chapters, I thought it would only be fitting if this were the case.

~Nickkat1985
~4ourEver

Thank you so much :)
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Nickkat1985 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Indeed, Paul was like a vessel for this story. No background, no emotions other than fear, not even a loved one or a friend to turn to for help. Damn! He is a teacher for crying out loud! Somebody help this guy!
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4ourEver Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
The things I like about this the most are things I wish I would've done in my own attempt. :P
The motives sound plausible and you try to give more insight into Paul's past. Well done.
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Nickkat1985 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Excellent. The choice of Symbiosis (which isn't a choice at all in my mind) is a great way of finally giving Paul a saying in the matter (which is the actual destruction of his life). Plus I looked up Al Shafi and learned something from your writing. All in all, a good read!
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princeofpencils Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Oh and - the quote's from "Al Shafi'. Though I guess I didn't have enough space to include that so I counted as Paul being too tired to name him.
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